Mitt Romney has beliefs that is going to hut our economy as well as the status of out country. He is only looking out for the rich people in our society and making sure that they wouldn't have to pay any taxes. Whereas, Barack Obama is trying to help the middle class will tax cuts because they're the ones who are getting hit the hardest. I would vote for Barack Obama because he has plans that will help our country economically and socially.
Romney wants to give the military 2 trillion dollars, but the military i snot asking for any money right now. He also wants to make a 5 trillion dollar tax cut, yet he still hasn't told the public where the money is going to come from. Obama, on the other hand, wants to increase the tax of the upper class because they can afford it rather than lowering their taxes. He also wants to make tax cuts on companies that create jobs in the United States.
Romney thinks that China is our biggest threat, but in reality they are not. China is our main trade partner that we go to all the time. Obama has the best plans for our county and he should get reelected as President. He has plans that will lower or debt and help our economy greatly.
Although it’s brief, you definitely made it clear who you favor. You give good examples of reason, but you lack severely with emotion and connection to the audience. If you expanded more on each topic or even added more reasons to your argument and then proceeded to go into greater detail on each, adding emotional connections with the audience, this would have been much more effective. Your points are clear, although slightly redundant, but the essay fails to provide that persuasive vibe needed.
ReplyDeleteHowever, you support Obama. So that’s a plus..
I'd agree with Tyler: While making clear that you want Barack Obama as President, you you lack pathos in doing so. Perhaps say how the tax-cuts would help your family or even more of your opinions on each point itself. You state each point clearly, I just think that you need to elaborate more in order to insert the pathos into your writing.
ReplyDeletethe main thing that i am seeing in this is the statement about china. China is the biggest threat even though they are one of the current major trade partners. The main reason for this is if china were to decide to stop trading with us, then our economy will suffer. I feel you need to add more detail about the information that you provide.
ReplyDeleteIt was very brief and to the point, but had good factual evidence. All you really need is to elaborate more on the facts and why those are important towards your statement on wanting Obama as President. You also need to reread for spelling errors, but add more emotion and details into it.
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